Denise R Zeiler

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UNFINISHED BUSINESS (Excerpt)

Jason: What possibility is there for me to succeed? What test to pass? What valley to cross? I’ve had the trials and all the shit poured upon me from the moment I was born.  Always to be better, never to give up. Be the best at everything. And now…

 

You know how many nights I sat awake, tossing, crying in fear of what I have become? You made me doubt  everything! Every fucking belief I had, was yours. Every goal I have ever strove to conquer was from you.

 

And you fucking took it all away from me. You would tell me to be strong…to fight. But what did you do? You just fuckin gave up …on…yourself…you gave up on me.

 

I’m sorry I wasn’t there for you I know your ghostly image will haunt me from every corner in the bright sun and remind me in the darkness of all I have suffered -- how can you do this to me?  Fight you said. Never give up. Never stop trying. And what did you do?!

 

You want my forgiveness for taking your life away from me and this is the moment...I...you...“NO!”

 

No I will not leave, please god, don’t take her away from me. I’ll give you everything you ever wanted, I’ll be whatever you want me to be. Please, please, please…please don’t leave me. I can’t do this on my own.

 

I love you, don’t leave me…please don’t leave me.

 

**This man was called into a hospital room to find out his wife/fiancée was murdered by a drug addict and the doctors were only able to save his unborn child whom he never knew about…..

 

September 15, 2002

BROTHERS GRIMM (Excerpt - Pilot)

 

New York, backstage of a magical act. Barrett has a girl straddling him, riding him pretty hard. Items fall from the shelves, flowers, top hats, sequins and other magic show related items…a bunny hops by.


WOMAN #1: Yes, baby, yes!

BARRETT: Call me Mr. Magic.

WOMAN #1: You are Mr. Magic.

A cell phone rings. Still going a hand breaks  through a feather boa to grab the cell phone….Barrett brushes the woman’s hair away so he can speak.


BARRETT: Yes?

GARY BIG: You’re late, again, where are you?

BARRETT: What? I need (looking at two breasts in his face) two minutes…(the woman makes her way between his legs) oohh, four…at least four.

GARY BIG: I’m not covering for you again. Be here in five minutes or find yourself another gig.

BARRETT: Ok, ok. I’ll be right … oh my god…I'm coming.  

Hanging up cell phone.


WOMAN #1: (Rising, wiping her mouth) So, do I get the job?

 

BARRETT: I’ll let you know. I gotta’ go.

Barrett collects his things and makes his way out of the room. Pan shot back to girl putting her clothes back on. Door closing. Tracking shot following Barrett from the costume closet  down assorted hallways through to the backstage area. Making adjustments on his appearance. A stage hand comes up to him.

 

EMILY: You’re late again. (Fixing his clothes)

BARRETT: I know.

EMILY: Another prospective job applicant? (Handing Barrett a bottle of mouthwash)

BARRETT: Don’t start. (Takes a swig of mouthwash)

EMILY: How you make it through the day…(Handing over a cup)

BARRETT: What’s the house look like?  (Spitting into cup and handing it back to Emily)

EMILY: Packed to the gills, like always. 

VOICE OVER A:  Ladies and Gentlemen it is our honor to introduce the magic of BARRETT GOLD…

BARRETT: How do I look?

EMILY: Like a guilty man..Go…go.


Emily lets out a little sigh. Barrett walks out on stage to center in a spot light. He turns back and blows a kiss to Emily who giggles and walks away.

SCENE 12: BROTHERS-Constant Resolutions (Excerpt)

ETHAN: Gavin...what are you doing here?

 

GAVIN: Thought I would pay a visit and see how you were doing?

 

ETHAN: How I am doing? What about you? What happened?

 

GAVIN: What do you mean?

 

ETHAN: I heard little pieces of the story about what happened to your team in the President’s house.

 

GAVIN: I can’t really talk about it.

 

ETHAN: It’s me.

 

GAVIN: I don’t have much time. I have to go but I needed to see you, to tell you. If something happens to me, I wanted to tell you I’m sorry.

 

ETHAN: What? What do you mean if something happens to you? I don’t understand.

 

GAVIN: I can’t say anything more right now.

 

ETHAN: You don’t look so good - are you all right? Is there something I can do?

 

GAVIN: These people want freedom but don’t want to get their hands dirty.

 

ETHAN: These people were born into a world that hates them.

 

GAVIN: Then pick up a fucking gun and make a change.

 

ETHAN: Now violence can change things?

 

GAVIN: Putting a gun to a man’s head will certainly make him listen.

 

ETHAN: This isn’t you. What happened.

 

GAVIN: Honorable soldiers in dishonorable situations.

 

ETHAN: What does that mean?

 

GAVIN: I can’t tell you...I did what I had to.

 

ETHAN: Tell me.

 

GAVIN: We thought she was hiding something. She was a girl...no more than a girl.

 

ETHAN: Who?

 

GAVIN: To get the truth. To get to the bottom of it.

 

ETHAN: I don’t understand.

 

GAVIN: Violence, torture. These are ways to find the truth. The gruesome, horrible truth. She didn’t know anything. She didn’t know anything.

 

ETHAN: This is not my brother.

 

GAVIN: I’m sorry.

 

ETHAN: Is that what you are sorry about? Or, are you just feeling guilty about what you did to Tiffany?

 

GAVIN: What I did?

 

ETHAN: I really loved getting a break-up letter in the middle of the fucking desert. Telling me how wonderful I am. How much I mean to her. But that’s all gone to shit when she realized how your the best fucking man in the entire world. If she could only see you now - then what would she think?

 

Gavin rushes to Ethan and places a choke hold on him.

 

GAVIN: Please don’t push me. I am not strong enough to handle this bullshit from you right now. Just listen to me - I don’t want to hurt you, I came to talk to you.

 

 

Ethan breaks free and they begin to fight throughout the following dialogue.

 

ETHAN: Hurt me? Get the fuck off me. You always need to talk about what you need, what you want. What about what Tiffany needs? You were coming out of a bad relationship with Debra and started sleeping with Simone. And now, you are done with Simone, you are moving onto Tiffany.

 

GAVIN: It’s not like that at all.

 

ETHAN: I’m not going to let you hurt her!

 

GAVIN: I need to leave - I can’t do this.

 

ETHAN: That’s right. Keep running away from anything real.

 

GAVIN: You want real? Try scooping up brains and blood and guts - trying to put a seven year old boy back together -- Try seeing your mother killed...

 

ETHAN: I was there remember? Don’t you forget that.

 

GAVIN: Ethan, for the first time in my life...I’m scared.

 

 

ETHAN: Now it’s a sob story?

 

GAVIN: Listen, you don’t know what it is like out there. You don’t know what it is like to be alone.

 

ETHAN: Neither do you.

 

GAVIN: What?

 

ETHAN: You were never alone. I have been there, Right beside you since we were kids. You never chose to accept that. Fuck you. We are through. If you need anything from me - now you will see what it is like to actually, truly and really to be alone.

 

GAVIN: I....I am a Ranger. I know the hazards of my chosen profession...

 

ETHAN: What?

 

GAVIN:...I am an elite soldier. My country expects me to move farther, faster and fight harder than any other soldier...

 

ETHAN: What the fuck is this?

 

Ethan stops...Gavin shakes loose. Gavin starts to pace methodically,

as if looking for something.

 

GAVIN: ...I will show the world that I am a specially selected and well-trained soldier...

 

ETHAN: Cut the shit! Come on this is getting ridiculous.

 

Ethan believes this is an act in order to get attention.

 

GAVIN: ...I will meet the enemies of my country....

 

Ethan begins to feel concern for his brother and cautiously crosses

to him.

 

ETHAN: Gavin! Gavin. Gavin? Are you ok?

 

GAVIN: ...I will display the fortitude required to fight...

 

Ethan stops Gavin.

 

ETHAN: Gavin, please, talk to me..What’s going on?

 

GAVIN: ...I be the lone survivor...I will never fail...

 

ETHAN: Gavin! Gavin can you hear me?

 

GAVIN: ...I am an Army Ranger...

 

Ethan puts Gavins arm around his shoulder and they take a moment

before they start to move.

 

ETHAN: I’m getting you out of here....

 

A series of explosions from ground rockets and mortars are heard.

Piles of smoke, dust and debris are thrown onto the stage. A whoosh is heard, Ethan tackles Gavin. There is an explosion. They both stand cautiously. Another whoosh is heard, Gavin grabs Ethan and they both fall backwards behind a row of sandbags. As they hit the  round...it explodes.

 

BLACK OUT

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